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Haunted
Jun 11, 2004 17:57:03 GMT -5
Post by Miss Knightley on Jun 11, 2004 17:57:03 GMT -5
This is a song I wrote a little while back.
There’s an all consuming darkness in the light of my soul Suffocating each breath that cries out for salvation
There’s an unyielding abuse to the child within Taking away an innocence that’s long been forgotten
And I feel haunted A ghost of who I used to be A lie that’s just a memory A tortured soul no one can see A shell of all that’s left of me Haunted
There’s a tunnel going downward in the center of a field Deceiving those believing for shelter from the rain
There’s a cry for help in a room full of deafness Leaving Death to consume its victim most unchallenged.
And I feel haunted A ghost of who I used to be A lie that’s just a memory A tortured soul no one can see A shell of all that’s left of me
A wreck before it’s taken part A broken, bleeding, dying heart A taken life before the start A self inflicted form of art Haunted
And I just cannot escape No matter where I run and hide, I will always feel
Haunted….
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Haunted
Jun 12, 2004 10:50:24 GMT -5
Post by Rainbow on Jun 12, 2004 10:50:24 GMT -5
Are you an Evanescence fan by any chance ;D You have the same kind of deep lyrical stlye. Gotta quote this one bit: There’s an unyielding abuse to the child within Taking away an innocence that’s long been forgotten because it's so powerful and a little on the depressing side, which is always good in a song ![;)](//storage.proboards.com/forum/images/smiley/wink.png)
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Haunted
Jun 12, 2004 11:12:57 GMT -5
Post by Loreley on Jun 12, 2004 11:12:57 GMT -5
woo!! Evanescence!! yay!! love them sooo much!! I've already told you, that I love this song, right? if not I LOVE IT!!
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Haunted
Jun 12, 2004 12:44:15 GMT -5
Post by Miss Knightley on Jun 12, 2004 12:44:15 GMT -5
lol, yeah, the few songs I have written are very like in style with theirs. I think it's cause "Fallen" inspired the song writer within me.
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Haunted
Jun 12, 2004 13:22:00 GMT -5
Post by Rainbow on Jun 12, 2004 13:22:00 GMT -5
I look forward to you debut album. Cuz these are good, and you with your four octave range. You're gonna go far. ![:D](//storage.proboards.com/forum/images/smiley/grin.png)
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Haunted
Jun 12, 2004 13:24:10 GMT -5
Post by Miss Knightley on Jun 12, 2004 13:24:10 GMT -5
*grins and blushes deeply * thank you
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Haunted
Jun 23, 2004 11:48:55 GMT -5
Post by Reens on Jun 23, 2004 11:48:55 GMT -5
A wreck before it’s taken part A broken, bleeding, dying heart A taken life before the start A self inflicted form of art
This as I understand captures the gist of the song.
.....and this
A shell of all that’s left of me
May I ask you to proof read some stuff I wrote? They are short. Mostly 4 lines. ;D
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Jun 23, 2004 11:55:46 GMT -5
Post by Miss Knightley on Jun 23, 2004 11:55:46 GMT -5
I would be more then honored!
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Haunted
Jun 23, 2004 12:06:51 GMT -5
Post by Reens on Jun 23, 2004 12:06:51 GMT -5
Heh. Honored? Spoken too soon twinnie! My stuff might be total crap for all you know! ![:-*](//storage.proboards.com/forum/images/smiley/kiss.png) Where can I email you? Or do you want to email me first? *Edit: Actually never mind. I was going through my stuff and found a couple. I will just post them here because I really need quick input on this. I am thinking of including "illusion" in the fiction I am currently writing. ~ Illusion ~ This thirst is a dream, and the shore delusion Dream, as are you, wanting you but a dream My destiny is a dream, my eyes no longer gleam Dream, as this voyage, and its paths ~ illusion This one was/is a work in progress... I wanna call it "Encircled" Unable to break the whirlwind of thoughts Desert afar yet I feel drowned Eternally stuck; confined by your love Thoughts of you; becoming my bounds Desert afar yet I feel drowned ....................
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Jun 24, 2004 12:47:08 GMT -5
Post by Miss Knightley on Jun 24, 2004 12:47:08 GMT -5
"Illusions" is very good. It reminds me of something someone would read at a poetry slam. You should put it in your story for sure.
Your "work in progress" blew me away. It hit me quite hard, for some reason. The simplicity in your lines made me feel quite complex emotions. I am really just in awe of it. Commpletely teriffic!!
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Haunted
Jun 24, 2004 14:08:32 GMT -5
Post by Rainbow on Jun 24, 2004 14:08:32 GMT -5
wow, they are really good.
i can't begin to understand them. reading it once and theres a hundred meaning and twice, yet more.
Nice!
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Haunted
Jun 24, 2004 18:53:11 GMT -5
Post by Reens on Jun 24, 2004 18:53:11 GMT -5
"Illusions" is very good. It reminds me of something someone would read at a poetry slam. You should put it in your story for sure. Your "work in progress" blew me away. It hit me quite hard, for some reason. The simplicity in your lines made me feel quite complex emotions. I am really just in awe of it. Commpletely teriffic!! Thanks. I am honored that you liked them. I will put 'Illusion' in then. I thought you would like "Encircled" ![;)](//storage.proboards.com/forum/images/smiley/wink.png) Someone very dear told me once (and I just wanted to share with you), "Whatever doesn't break you makes you stronger!" I just hope the meaning of it is not bemused by the back-to-back comparison of a 'desert' to 'drowning waters'
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Jun 24, 2004 18:57:55 GMT -5
Post by Reens on Jun 24, 2004 18:57:55 GMT -5
wow, they are really good. i can't begin to understand them. reading it once and theres a hundred meaning and twice, yet more. Nice! *Moochiez* You are such a babe! Thank You! Actually I thought 'Illusion' would be good for the ficcy, coz it subtle pessimism. It exhibits the feeling of ‘nothingness’ one feels after losing their life’s goal, i.e. love. I refrained from using “night mare” mostly because poem would’ve initiated with pessimism and the effect of word “illusion” would’ve lost its ‘means.’ The means being “dream” = “delusion.” Scientifically speaking of course ![;)](//storage.proboards.com/forum/images/smiley/wink.png)
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