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Post by venus567 on Oct 9, 2004 17:58:43 GMT -5
Here's my currenmt fanfic that's in progress. Disclaimer: I bear no connections to the celbrities in this fanfic! Yet the storyline is different and not imated form anyone else's!
Author's message: This story stars Orlando Bloom, Keira Knightely, , , Kate Bosworth, Jamie Dorwan. Some special entrances are planned for this fanfic. (hint :my third fanfic included this on- screen pair which acted together in a movie that took place in New York!) Please pm any guesses you have about the plot, please don't post them here! Thanks. This story is dedicated to all my loyal readers. P.S I'll try to update as much as possible until it's completed! ---------------------------------------------------------------
Chapter One- Breaking ups! Orlando slammed the door shut. How could Kate break up with like that! Kate had said," Orlando I can't stand comprising anymore!" Kate broke up with him for a petty reason. After all they'd spent three years having a great relationship. Comprises also occurred in non-disatnt realtionships. Sure rumors had sprung about them breaking up before, but why didn't Kate love him anymore?
Kate called later that night. Kate: Orlando listen love. I'm sorry Please tell me how I can amke it up to you. Orlando: No Kate. I've realized we fell out of love a long time ago. You don't even remember the meaning of love. Feeling distraught Orlando hung up the phone.
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Meanwhile at Keira's apartment that very night. "Jamie how could you tell the press we 're engaged before you popped the question!," Keira exclaimed. Jamie said," I thought it would be great for a publicty," Jamie replied. Keira gave him an incredlous look. "You mean to say you wanted the media to pressure our familes and us about the enagement date? Come on Jamie. That would definately make it a field day for that pal of yours at the London Sun Times. I should never let you invite him to dinner!," Keira cried. Jamie said," Keira I'm sorry!" Keira looked at the guy in front of her. "You did this only further your career Jamie! I know you wanted to break up with me ," Keira admantly stated Jamie asked," How could I do something like that? I love you Keira," Jamie said pleadlingly. "You fell out of love with me awhile ago Jamie! I heard you talking to your agent!," Keira stammered. Jamie's eyes widened. "When and how could you hear something like this?," Jamie asked bewlidered. Keira gave him a firece look. "Outside the resturant yesterday at the Pavillion!," Keira said firmly. Jamie turned dumbfounded. "Keira I...," Jamie trailed off. "Just leave!," Keira cried in despair. Jamie left and Keira closed the door after him and she cried a mountian of tears P.s Does anyone want to make a banner for this story? Thanks and hope you enjoyed this chapter!
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Post by Araminta Ditch on Oct 9, 2004 18:54:58 GMT -5
seems interesting enough... ;D Next chapter don't rush through the paragraphs, be careful with your spelling, and it'll be all good.
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Post by venus567 on Oct 9, 2004 23:13:56 GMT -5
Thanks! Hopefullly this has less spelling misktakes than the first chapter. Chapter2 Keira smiled for the first time in a month when she saw the inviation for a costume party. It was at her friend Jackie's place. Jackie loved costume parties. Keira knew Jackie was just trying to make her feel better. She called up the costume designer from Pirates of Caribbean. "Hello! I was wondering if I could have that dress I wear at the hanging scene," Keira stated. The answer was a yes. Keira smiled with glee. She was going to have agreat time at this party. Hopefully she could meet somone new. ---------------------------------------------------------- Meanwhile Orlando too recived a inviation for Jackie's party. He too had the same thought and recived his Will Turner outfit from the same scene. "I hope Kate doesn't get invited," Orlando sighed. Jackie only knew Orlando from Keira and Kate. Keira had given Jackie tickets to the Potc premire the year before. Jackie had been Kate alternate make-up artist on the sets of Win a Date with Tad Hamilton. "I just hope I can forget Kate,"Orlando thought to himself. Although Orlando and Keira wanted to forget their exes, something would happen that would spring a feeling of hatred and ulimately change their lives forever.
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Post by Araminta Ditch on Oct 10, 2004 8:56:55 GMT -5
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! keira and orli have the same ideas!!!! pffffffaaaa!!
anyways.......sorry bout that, sudden burst of laughter. Happens allll the time.
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Post by venus567 on Oct 10, 2004 16:47:39 GMT -5
Thanks! On Magic Me into Your World I have currently one reader and here your my only reader, Well on theobfiles I have two readers right now. Here's more!
Here's chapter 3!
Jamie knew that Keira would try to forget him soon enough. Yet he wanted her to never forget him. Jamie knew Jackie and decided he wasn't going to the party. He wanted to give Keira one more night of security before he struck. Jamie accquired Kate's help. He knew Orlando was going to the party and that Kate and Orlando had broken up as well.
Kate sat weeping in her bedroom. She regereted letting Orlando go. The phone rang. Kate eagerly rushed towards it, hoping it was Orlando, "Hello?," Kate said. "Hey Kate !," Jamie said. Kate was devastated it wasn't Orlando that had called. Jamie said," I heard about your break-up and I'm sure you've heard about mine. I have a plan and I think we both can get back what we've lost." Kate stopped sniffling. "I'm listening Jamie. Go on," Kate insisted.
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"Keira that's the dress you wore in that last scene in POTC!," Jackie squealed. Keira smiled. Jackie added," Now I have two real film stars in attendance." Keira frowned. "Who else is here?," Keira asked puzzled. "Duh!, The one and only Orlando Bloom!," Jackie exclaimed. She led Keira to the living room. Orlando sat in the window love seat by himself. Jackie who was dressed up as Cinderella soon found her Prince Charming and walked away, leaving Keira face to face with Orlando. Orlando looked intently in her eyes suddenly. Keira stood motionlessly. Orlando said,"Hi Keira." It snapped Keira back into the present and she said hi back and they sat together and talked throughout the night.
Okay I'll update whenever I can!
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Post by Jems on Oct 10, 2004 16:51:54 GMT -5
lmao! Thats even funnier then when I called him "Jamie Doorman", even Hari hasn't got over that. lol it's Jamie Dornan Sweets:)
Oh the advice up there to slow down, I agree. Otherwise its good, why don't you get a Beta Reader? I think it would do wonders to your writing skills:)
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Post by Araminta Ditch on Oct 10, 2004 17:23:35 GMT -5
wow Jackie's just lil miss polular here isn't she? EVERYONE just seems to know her If I know orlando and Jamie I'd be wearing a leather bikini everytime they would come by..........yeaa you know you want some
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Post by venus567 on Oct 10, 2004 23:24:44 GMT -5
Thanks for your replies! Yeah Jamie Dornan. Well everyone makes mistakes! lol. Well I have written a couple of fanfics before but this is the first time somebody told me to get a beta reader. If anyone would like to check my orginal stories out that don't have famous people in them let me know. I have some posted online. The reason I don't have a beta reader is because what if start disagreeing with the way I write? Besides atleast with my writing I hope to post whenever I feel like or I just plain have time!
Here 's more ! Chapter 4 Orlando and Keira walked into the night and looked at the stars. Orlando asked,"So would you like to meet up again?" Keira smiled. "Well I'd like to not just for work of course," Keira stated. Orlando grinned. "Well how about we get drunk off of tea like when we went out after the premire?," Orlando asked gleefully. Keira laughed. "Yes that would be divine Mr. Turner!," Keira said before heading towards home. ------------------------------------------------------ The following morning everything was as Jamie hoped. He'd grab Keira first before he helped Kate drag Orlando to the cabin as well. Keira was just preparing some breakfast, when Jamie approached. Keira senses someone behind her . Before she could turn all the way however, Jamie slammed the pot on her head. Jamie smiled with smitten confidence. "Miss Knigthley here comes your worst nightmare!," Jamie stated.
-------------------------------------------------------- Meanwhile Orlando came into the kitchen and poured himself a glass of orange juice. He turned around for a moment and was surprised to find Kate standing behind him a minute later. Kate smiled evily. "I drugged your juice love," Kate stated before Orlando felt woozy and collasped.
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Post by Kayla on Oct 11, 2004 17:17:13 GMT -5
Kate smiled evily. "I drugged your juice love," Kate stated before Orlando felt woozy and collasped.
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Post by Kayla on Oct 11, 2004 17:18:30 GMT -5
i can imagine me doing that my ex lmao!! ahhh...that would be fun...
ANYWAYZ!! goooood story, keep it up! UPDATE SOOOOOOOOOOOOON!
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Post by Araminta Ditch on Oct 11, 2004 18:01:37 GMT -5
lol, slow down a bit, woman!! You're going way too fast, and I don't mean for you to take offense. Just slow down your pace a bit and its fine
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Post by Jems on Oct 12, 2004 3:45:34 GMT -5
A Beta Reader would not even agree to start looking at your story if they did not even like the way you write. A beta reader picks out mistakes and gives advice on how to rephrase sentences in order to make your chapters perfect. Also if you tell them where the plot is going, they can help you with the way you build up to certain scences and also when your stuck, help you with ideas etc. Beta Readers are absolutely wonderful at their jobs, I love Renee ;D
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Post by venus567 on Oct 12, 2004 15:14:20 GMT -5
Hey thanks for the advice. Just let you know I have up to chapter eight posted on the theobfiles.
Here's more! Chapter five b]Chapter 5[/b] Orlando awakened in a dusky room. He stared around at his suuroundings. He noticed somone else was laying a few feet away. Orlando edged over to the figure. He turned her over and gasped. "Keira!," Orlando whispered. He looked at the back of her head. She had it worse than him. There was a large bump and sight dried blood. Keira moaned. "Where I am?," she mumbled. Orlando replied,"I guess we're both victims of our exes." Keira opened her eyes wider. "Yes I do believe it was Jamie who hit me ," Keira stated remorsefully. Orlando peered around the room. "It's a basement alright." Orlando stated. He heard whispers and slight footsteps. He listened in. Kate: What do you suppose we do with them now? Jamie: I say we torture them until they give in and beg us to come back. Kate: I might be able to convince Orlando but what about Keira? Jamie: (chuckles) Keira's tuff but I have something in mind. Right now I'm going to explore this cabin. Seems like somone might use this place ocassionaly. We better make plans, just in case. Kate: Yes. We might now be able to take them out of the country, but I'm sure they are other places. Orlando withdrew from listening.
"Keira there's good news! The real owners might be our chance out of here," Orlando stated. Keira smiled slightly. "I hope they make it here quickly," Keira commented with her head in her hands [/color]
Don't worry, there is much more coming up!
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Post by Reens on Oct 16, 2004 0:49:52 GMT -5
Hey Saturn, I am wondering if you saw my post in the archive section? Do you want to start posting your recommendations in the Fiction Section? In order to get to the Fiction Archival Section please click the button in the bottom named "Fiction." Register a user name and post. I do recommend that you get it beta'ed before you post. Thanks for your interest. lOve YoU tO JeM JeM
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Post by venus567 on Oct 16, 2004 8:23:14 GMT -5
Hey Serena! I'll do it as soon as i HAVE TIME. I just read your post!
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Post by Rosie on Oct 17, 2004 14:02:06 GMT -5
interesting plot you have here...
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Post by venus567 on Oct 19, 2004 17:17:54 GMT -5
Thanks here's more! Here's more! Chapter Six Jamie felt like taking some action. Orlando and Keira should have been awakened by now. "Kate is the soup ready?," Jamie asked. Kate replied,"Yeah. Let's go check out how our prsoners are doing." Jamie walked down into the basement followed by Kate. Keira sat with her head in her hands and Orlando in a corner a few feet away. Kate walked over to Orlando. "Hey love I brought you some soup!," Kate stated cheerfully. Orlando rolled his eyes. "You don't know the meaning of love Kate!," Orlando exclaimed. Kate slammed the the tray on the side table and stormed up the stairs. Kate wanted to back with Orlando. However she realized it would be diffcult because of her mistake.
Jamie stood observing all this before he tried to deal with Keira. "Keira come on look at me!," Jamie said loudly Keira lifted her head from her hands. "You want to make -up after all this?," Keira asked outraged. Jamie stiffened. "Keira you have no clue what I did to bring you here!," Jamie stammered. He too headed up the stairs after Kate, Keira said," What a bunch of pussies!" Orlando chuckled. "And we used to think we were in love with them," Orlando commented.
------------------------------------------------------------ On the other side of London, a man of forty-four was joined by a female companion as they hailed a taxi. Perhaps after a meeting or two they'd head down to the cabin after all.
Okay hope you enjoyed this update! banner: img.photobucket.com/albums/v153/MrsWillTurner15/held_hostage__cvr2.jpg
Thanks Mrs.WillamTurner15 aka. Andy!
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Post by Araminta Ditch on Oct 19, 2004 17:52:30 GMT -5
great banner.
you should really consider getting a beta reader. It would do wonders for your writing skills. everone can imoprove on something.
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Post by venus567 on Oct 22, 2004 16:40:04 GMT -5
b]Chapter 7[/b]
Jamie was ready to take some real action. "Kate I bet they think we're a bunch of pussies," Jamie stated. Kate looked up from her favorite magzine In Touch. "So what? The media isn't even making fuss since that party two days ago," Kate replied. Jamie scowled. "Kate we can't risk media attention or the real owners of this palce put the spotllight on us. All we do is threaten them with a gun," Jamie stated. Kate gave him a puzzled look. Jamie grinned. "Last month I visited my long lost cousin who happens to have the same first and last name as me." Jamie stated. Kate asked,"So if someone were to check out the registration number, they find your cousin not us?" Jamie replied,"Yeah!," ------------------------------------------------------------
Orlando and Keira perked up upon hearing Jamie and Kate's footsteps. Jamie came towards Keira. He piinned her arm. Keira glowered as Kate pulled out a gun. "Orlando, Keira you both better agree to our terms or...," Kate trailed off as the sounds of footsteps could be heard above them.
---------------------------------------------------------------------- Chapter Eight "I think someone here honey,"the woman said. "I really should have somone watching this house,"the man replied. The couple heard muffled noises from the basement. "I guess we're about to find out who these intruders are," the man said. The couple glowered at the scene before them. "Exuse me but what are you doing here?, the man asked.
Jamie turned to face them. "I'm Jamie Dornan and this here is my girlfriend," Jamie said gripping Keira 's arm tightly. Keira looked at the man. "Oh Hugh please help us! Kate and Jamie kidnapped me and Orlando," Keira stammered. She gasped. "They drugged Orlando and they hit me over the head!," Keira said before fainting. Meanwhile the woman went over to Kate who was in a trance. Kate stood in a trance aiming the gun at Orlando. The woman quickly broke Kate's nose which brought her out of her trance. "Great work Sandra!,"Hugh exclaimed. Sandra chuckled. "I guess my Miss Congenality days will always be with me," Sandra stated. Hugh turned to Jamie. "Listen Mr. Dorwan. Keira's family are friends of mine. Keira is like a younger sister for me. You hurt her and I'm going to make your days as miserable as you made hers,"Hugh stated. Jamie yelled,"Kate shoot them!" But Kate winced with paiin Page 1 2 3
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Post by Araminta Ditch on Oct 22, 2004 17:09:29 GMT -5
cool. i still say slow down a bit.
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